Comments on: Heavy Thoughts http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/ The semi-sci fi comic of the future... sort of. Wed, 19 Nov 2008 03:43:38 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5 By: Enter The Monkey | Jet Packs and Time Machines http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-311 Enter The Monkey | Jet Packs and Time Machines Sun, 22 Jul 2007 05:08:53 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-311 [...] If you want to check out Part One first, You can check it out here. [...] […] If you want to check out Part One first, You can check it out here. […]

]]> By: jim http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-234 jim Mon, 16 Jul 2007 02:58:20 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-234 @Phil: Nice art by the way. @Phil: Nice art by the way.

]]> By: jim http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-233 jim Mon, 16 Jul 2007 02:50:33 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-233 Thanks for the feedback. I've been just adding the titles as afterthoughts (pun not intended) on most of these. I should probably consider thinking through them more. (oh geez...) Your concept would work better with that title certainly, but when I used the title, I was visualizing it more in terms of relative weight. What I mean is that thought bubbles generally float about the characters, but my idea in this joke was that adam lets his mind wander and it grows out of his control. Admittedly, the 'think think think' throws the whole thing off and takes it in the wrong direction. I'm reworking this one, so that it fits with the jokes that come after it, and I think I've smoothed it out a bit. The fourth panel isn't supposed to be that funny. It's supposed to be cheesy. The attempted humor in this joke was to show two self absorbed characters. One who lets his thoughts/ imagination run wild, and one who's in love with his own wit. I will admit I did stumble a bit on this joke. Thanks for the feedback. I’ve been just adding the titles as afterthoughts (pun not intended) on most of these. I should probably consider thinking through them more. (oh geez…)

Your concept would work better with that title certainly, but when I used the title, I was visualizing it more in terms of relative weight. What I mean is that thought bubbles generally float about the characters, but my idea in this joke was that adam lets his mind wander and it grows out of his control. Admittedly, the ‘think think think’ throws the whole thing off and takes it in the wrong direction. I’m reworking this one, so that it fits with the jokes that come after it, and I think I’ve smoothed it out a bit. The fourth panel isn’t supposed to be that funny. It’s supposed to be cheesy. The attempted humor in this joke was to show two self absorbed characters. One who lets his thoughts/ imagination run wild, and one who’s in love with his own wit. I will admit I did stumble a bit on this joke.

]]> By: Phil http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-232 Phil Mon, 16 Jul 2007 02:00:15 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-232 I don't think the third panel works and the fourth is weird because it's not that funny to bother writing down for later use. It's mildly humorous at best. I think the title of your post "Heavy thoughts" lends itself to this strip much more conducive than the punch line in the third panel. Panel 1- think think think .. Panel 2 - put something heavy in the bubble, like an anvil , or fill the bubble with the word "THINK" and show it start to sag Panel 3-FWOOPH! Panel 4- have him crawling out of a hole, as though a bomb hit the ground "You've got to stop thinking such heavy thoughts." *having him stuck floating in a thought bubble doesn't visually describe him being crushed by heavy thoughts I don’t think the third panel works and the fourth is weird because it’s not that funny to bother writing down for later use. It’s mildly humorous at best. I think the title of your post “Heavy thoughts” lends itself to this strip much more conducive than the punch line in the third panel.

Panel 1- think think think ..

Panel 2 - put something heavy in the bubble, like an anvil , or fill the bubble with the word “THINK” and show it start to sag

Panel 3-FWOOPH!

Panel 4- have him crawling out of a hole, as though a bomb hit the ground “You’ve got to stop thinking such heavy thoughts.”

*having him stuck floating in a thought bubble doesn’t visually describe him being crushed by heavy thoughts

]]> By: Enter The Monkey | Jet Packs and Time Machines http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-217 Enter The Monkey | Jet Packs and Time Machines Fri, 13 Jul 2007 16:26:55 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-217 [...]  If you want to check out Part One first, You can check it out here. [...] […]  If you want to check out Part One first, You can check it out here. […]

]]> By: zedvilla http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-187 zedvilla Tue, 10 Jul 2007 23:01:09 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-187 I think it is missing the facal exspetion of the guy in the though bubble. That is what makes one liners fun in real life. I think it is missing the facal exspetion of the guy in the though bubble. That is what makes one liners fun in real life.

]]> By: jim http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-186 jim Tue, 10 Jul 2007 22:18:16 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-186 yeah, that's exactly what gets to me... that the comic can't completely stand alone without the accursed explanation. Hopefully tomorrows comic will stand alone (except for the fact that it's a continuation of this one). yeah, that’s exactly what gets to me… that the comic can’t completely stand alone without the accursed explanation. Hopefully tomorrows comic will stand alone (except for the fact that it’s a continuation of this one).

]]> By: The Cheesinator http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-185 The Cheesinator Tue, 10 Jul 2007 19:25:53 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-185 yeah, without the explanation i didn't really totally understand, but it's fairly amusing nonetheless. It reminds me of people in my high school making obvious puns that are terrible but still funny. also, the art style is fantastic. yeah, without the explanation i didn’t really totally understand, but it’s fairly amusing nonetheless. It reminds me of people in my high school making obvious puns that are terrible but still funny.

also, the art style is fantastic.

]]> By: jim http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-184 jim Tue, 10 Jul 2007 16:42:53 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-184 @worth: Yeah, I sot of thought the same thing... I think this was a case of trying to cram a complex idea in to a small space. I've got to learn that sometimes I can go bigger when I need to. @ Wit: Yeah... it was an abrupt start for sure... I can't help but feel that I just handled the whole thing a little awkwardly... I think I might post a couple variations later... @worth: Yeah, I sot of thought the same thing… I think this was a case of trying to cram a complex idea in to a small space. I’ve got to learn that sometimes I can go bigger when I need to.

@ Wit: Yeah… it was an abrupt start for sure… I can’t help but feel that I just handled the whole thing a little awkwardly… I think I might post a couple variations later…

]]> By: Worth http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/heavy-thoughts/#comment-183 Worth Tue, 10 Jul 2007 14:38:24 +0000 http://jetpacksandtimemachines.com/2007/07/09/heavy-thoughts/#comment-183 This may be one of those cartoons that would work better in the Sunday format. You can steadily show the thought balloon getting bigger and bigger over his head until it collapses around him. This may be one of those cartoons that would work better in the Sunday format. You can steadily show the thought balloon getting bigger and bigger over his head until it collapses around him.

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