Yeah, I like the commentary and the critique, and I think I will just start posting it with the strip again. As for the security speak, yeah, peepers to domes is eyes front… I thought that one might throw a few people, but I couldn’t think of a better way to say “eyes on the skull of the kid in front of you” in just three words.

I haven’t seen your kids going to school (If I did I might have some explaining to do…) but I have been through airport security more than once and it’s a similar process. I’m also on the no-fly list, so I get hassled a little more than most.

I don’t like the separate comments forums though. I’d think it would be kind of a pain for you to keep track of too (?).

oh, and for good measure let me add: [shakes fist]

@ Scott V: NO! New people get no opinions! I kid of course, thanks for the feedback! As to the writing, I’ve acknowledged before, it certainly is my weakness, and I’m aware of it and working on it. As for people objectively looking at my writing before I start drawing, I can’t really work that way. I’m tweaking and changing the dialog right up until the end. The majority of the time it leads to a better strip (although not always.) I’m actually not bad at judging my own writing, and I knew this one was weak, but unfortunately, it came down to available time, or lack there of. I had to get a strip out, and unfortunately, sacrifices have to be made on occasion.

@ Lugh: [shakes fist] WHAT!?! How dare you criticize the zombie panel! Actually, I think maybe the zombie panel lacked punch due to my focus on making sure I got the scanner effect right. IT was the only panel other than the first one, that I drew only once, so it might not have gotten the attention to the narrative effort that it needed.

@bug: Yeah, visual interest I got… It’s them darn jokes that are bit slippery to nail down. As for the extended notes, I like ‘em, but I’m getting a bit of flak for the separate posting places, so I might have to return to posting them below the comic, and just keep the other section for going into other comic technique type discussions.

@ Rachel: Yeah, that hair is really starting to work out. I was wrestling with it a lot in the early strips, but it seems to be falling into place.

@ Jarrett: I already decided to take the technical discussion back to the top, so that settles that.

My suggestion is make one comment section like you had it. Post whatever thoughts you want below the comic like always…if people don’t want to read it they don’t have to…the comment button is still there.

“Shamble and peepers to dome”..I know…I had to read it like 3 times…going back for a fourth.
Just write in Japanese next time.