Just messing with you. As far as the writing goes, I’ve been considering the same thing recently (just last night actually). I’m going to try to write more for sure. I won’t lie, character development is definitely my weakness.

In defense of the critique though, it’s not the art side I worry about (other than drawing faster)… what the goal of the critique is supposed to be, is focusing on the narrative aspects of the art (although we do get sidetracked sometimes). Part of character development in a visual media such as comics, involves figuring out how to draw those characters expressing emotions, or how to express things visually. I’m still working on it.

Don’t even mention spelling, I get nervous when I hear the ’s’ word…

Yeah, nothing will snap someone out of the realm you’ve created like a misspelled word. I speak from experience.

JESUS NO….don’t touch the last panel. That panel is fine. Another way to fix the 3rd last is keep the pose of adam, but hve him passing fred, bring adam over to the right, and have fred turning his head past his shoulder.

I never thought of Adam as special. Having known Jim for 2 years now, I can say that he is as impatient and logical as Fred but with Adam’s I don’t give a rat’s arse attitude. Basically…it’s better to Read Jim’s comic than it is to actually know him.

Hm… maybe I’ll do a re-draw with Adam facing Fred. What I was going for there, is that fred goes on a tirade in the second row of panels, then stops and faces adam down, and adam just walks by him, and continues doing what he was doing. I could have him turn in that last panel though. (I drew his ears too far back on his head too)

I have the same reaction as Jarrett to Adam walking in the seventh panel. I would like to see them both just standing looking at each other.

I’m still getting to know the characters. It’s clear that Fred is intelligent and sarcastic. I had assumed that Adam was, um, “special,” but this strip makes it seem like he’s smarter than I had previously thought.

Great stuff, Jim.

@Gwen: Oh geez. You’re excused this time… THIS TIME! (shakes fist)

@Jarrett (TPOM Creator): Other people might have seen yesterdays illustration!

Wow….so that’s what 800 x 600 looks like. Zuda comics, here you come. This is the first comic in awhile where you are, at least in my opinion, showing a tighter sense of control bachground wise. Everything from placement to shading to quantity…the back grounds for me are spot on.

This is also the first comic where Adam is never drawn in your standard profile, here we see him directly on the side 3 times, shaded twice and from the back once. No standard view of Adam and that struck me strange because Adam looks different to me. I mean he should, you drew him in all the non-regular views…but it’s the first thing I noticed when I finished reading…huh?…Adam looks different.

All the slanted middle panels look great to me. Not sure about the 3rd last one. Adam walking is throwing me off. I think a stronger panel would maybe be a zoomed view of either of their faces, a bewildered, awkward look or something. Or, myabe the panel works and I’m the minority as usual.

Art work is at its best as usual. Writing is also up there, getting better every day (or twice a week)

*On a side note - 700+ unique yesterday with well over 100 returning fans…and Scott and I are the only ones who saw your beautiful illustration. Just email it to us next time.

It’s “primitive”.

Please don’t vaporize me.